Clarity and Tone in Gardening Narrative

Medium Rhetorical Skills Style

Read the following passage:

During the summer, Samantha decided to take up gardening. She was excited and spent hours researching different plants that could thrive in her backyard. As she dug in the soil, she felt a newfound connection to nature. The vibrant colors of the flowers and the earthy scent of the soil brought her joy. However, as the days turned into weeks, she began to notice that her initial enthusiasm was waning; the weeds were flourishing while her seedlings struggled to survive.

Which of the following revisions best preserves the author's original tone while improving the passage's clarity?

During the summer, Samantha enthusiastically embraced gardening, excitedly researching countless plants and reveling in her new connection to nature.

Samantha chose gardening during summer, beginning to research plants to grow; she felt connected to her work as she dug into the soil.

Samantha took up gardening in the summer. Her research was extensive, and while she felt a connection to nature, her seedlings did not thrive.

In the summer, Samantha decided to garden. After researching various plants, she quickly became discouraged as her seedlings struggled.

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