Effective Sentence Revision in Descriptive Context

Very Easy Expression Of Ideas Effective Language Use

Read the following sentence:

During the warm summer days, the park is filled with children playing, parents chatting, and dogs running around happily.

Which revision best improves the clarity and effectiveness of this sentence?

The park is filled with children playing, parents, chatting, and happily dogs running around.

On warm summer days, children play, parents chat, and dogs run around happily in the park.

Children playing, parents chatting, and dogs happily running around fills the park during warm summer days.

The park fills up with children and parents chatting during summer days.

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