Enhancing Conciseness in Descriptive Writing

Hard Rhetorical Skills Style

Consider the following sentence:

"With the final notes of the symphony reverberating in the concert hall, the audience erupted into applause, their claps echoing like the sounds of thunder rolling across the sky."

Which revision enhances the style of this sentence by improving its conciseness without losing its vivid imagery?

"As the symphony's last notes filled the concert hall, the audience burst into applause, their claps resonating like thunder."

"The audience, filled with excitement, clapped loudly as the symphony came to a close, creating a thunderous sound in the hall."

"When the symphony finished, the audience responded with overwhelming applause, and their claps echoed through the hall like rolling thunder."

"The symphony's final notes resonated, and the audience, thrilled, applauded, their claps echoing like the sound of distant thunder."

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